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The maximum is 900 words and I have done...965 D: And 900 is honestly the /very/ maximum. The not-as-maximum is 700.
Well, here it is. (NB: the conclusion is meant to be a sentence saying that; she said to keep it as 'I think my story went well and contrasted/was similar to blahblahblah' ).

And Her People is a dystopian story set in the year 2143, in a union of countries in which less attractive people are despised and used as slave labour. It is part of a story and I chose this type of text as I could allude to things which could come up later in the story and foreshadow various events to keep the reader intrigued.

The piece of writing is set in 'The United Continents of Europe and Asia' (UCEA). The main political view in UCEA is Ricksonism, an offshoot of fascism in which the entire state is controlled by a totalitarian government and their branch of special services which could be linked to the Nazi SS, the Hunters. And Her People is affected by the image of models and attractive actors and actresses in the media. Today, people tend to obsess over cosmetic surgery and losing weight in order to look like their idols. It was also influenced by the use of some prescription drugs and how they are often offered to those with mental health difficulties before therapy (for example, Ritalin or Prozac).

I contrasted and compared my piece with Brave New World in several ways; Brave New World is about oppressing the masses by giving them what they supposedly want mostly by the use of free recreational sex and the drug soma. I contrasted this with the use of violence and threats to oppress people in my own piece, and the use of drugs as control as well. Additionally, in Brave New World, names are used to tell things about the character. For example, Bernard Marx is named for Bernard Shaw and Karl Marx, and his attitudes in the book reflect the radical views of his namesakes – he isn't as content as his fellows in the World State, just how Marx was not content with many political systems at the time. The name of my character - Sergei Johannes Källe - could be considered ironic; Sergei means servant, when in the extract he kills the old leader. Additionally, Johannes means 'God is gracious' and Sergei – who almost sees himself as a god – offered no mercy to Rickson.

In my piece, I have used a lexical set of knives: knife, steel, blade, edge, trench-spike. These words were used to allude to the violence of Rickson's murder, despite how it is never described, and also adds to the atmosphere of fear between the people watching his death. Additionally, these words connote danger, which adds to Sergei's personality somewhat; despite his position as a top Hunter, he is more than able to kill by himself as well as give orders, and suggests a fixation with knives, along with the line, “Surrounded by the means to kill thousands of people at the touch of a button, the direct danger in a knife fight gave life an edge”. I also used a lexical set of ice: cold, Arctic, blue-grey, coolly. I also referred to colder places: Greenland, the Bering Straits and Arkangelsk to add to the lexical set. The set adds to Sergei's rather cold and emotionless way of acting and his personality without explicitly stating it in the text. Additionally, both of these sets add to a darker tone within the piece.

I used the metaphor of 'God' to refer to Rickson's – and later Sergei's – power as leader of UCEA. God' also shows the importance and how they are seen by the people of UCEA, as indestructible and to be worshipped. This is complimented by the name of the Russian place Arkangelsk (Archangel) suggesting Sergei's father who was killed there was Rickson's second in command. The word 'God' connotes omniscience, omnipotence and benevolence. The killing of Rickson suggests he was seen as Godlike, although he wasn't actually so, as he was easily murdered.


The exclamatives, “God is dead – he was ugly, sick and weak!” and “I have smashed God's light! Ugly, sick and weak!” show power and force. The dynamic verb 'smashed' adds to this, and also suggests 'God's' fragility. The adjectives 'ugly, sick and weak' also reflect frailty and suggest that 'God' is undesirable in UCEA if he is ugly. It could also suggest he is unfit for rule by use of 'weak'. The phrase, 'God is dead' could be shocking to the reader, therefore showing the impact Rickson's death would have on UCEA.

In Brave New World, the line, “the light was frozen, dead, a ghost” is used. This could be compared with my own line, “The cold, bright light reflected off of the lenses of his glasses”. The word 'light' connotes hope and warmth, whereas in both pieces it is described as cold, therefore it could allude to situations which may well be hopeless.

In Chapter 10 of Brave New World, the line “the newly-unbottled babes uttered their first yell of horror and amazement” is used, which I contrasted with my own, “then cold ecstasy flowing through his veins, liquid bliss and death in his blood.” Juxtaposition is used in both of this extracts: horror with amazement in Brave New World, then bliss with death in And Her People. The word 'flowing' connotes smoothness, however, which contrasts with Huxley's use of 'yell', suggesting distress. The word 'ecstasy' in my own quote suggests a link with drugs and also the emotion 'ecstasy', which compliments 'bliss' and juxtaposes with 'death' once again. In Brave New World, the word 'amazement' suggests that although the babies are horrified, they are also intrigued by the world around them. Amazement, however, could be considered synonymous with 'awe' and therefore could connote fear as well as full of wonder.

In conclusion, I think that my own piece went well and contrasted well with Brave New World.

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